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Nightwalker



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySun Feb 02, 2020 2:35 pm

RosieAnnieUSA – It’s so good to meet Wheat and Kyle again. They make such unequal partner, yet they work perfectly together. Nevertheless, they share a distinct kind of logic and a particular way to look at things.
Bad things happen when they split up? to be honest I don’t dare to imagine that. They are bad enough together ;-)
It’s interesting to learn more about their background. I like Wheat being of Swedish origin and as part of a (once?) big family. When things run bad, he showed more than once that he has a big heart somewhere underneath the rough cover of his behavior.
I see why you added a note telling us that you won’t write more in this story line. It sure is an interesting scenario with lovely characters which will readers make wish for more.
Me too.

WichitaRed – The boys on the run, soaking wet and just hoping for some rest and basic comfort surely hit the wrong town this time. It’s a more serious story which shows us very clear the difference between regular small-town folks and two pretty decent ex-outlaws.
Manners and decency don’t depend on wealth and status. It’s a choice to make and the most basic evidence of what kind of man someone is.
Heyes and Curry still tend to wrong decisions due to their new goal to get amnesty; not about their purpose in particular situations, but the ways they chose to accomplish it. One thing they are for sure: true men in the best meaning of the word.
I’m sorry the boys had to take their leave so soon, but I’m glad you shared this story with us that gives us a lot to think about.
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gin16



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyMon Feb 24, 2020 6:23 pm

WichitaRed:  What was wrong with those people?  Poor Wheat, he just wanted a drink.  With the other 5 members of the gang going in after Wheat, Heyes and Kid seemed to decided they wouldn't be needed and waited outside, smart men!  I enjoyed it.

RosieAnnieUSA:  I really liked this.  I did wonder who was telling the story.  I loved how Heyes stepped up to be Matthew, it was a real kindness to the grandmother.   They did everything they could to inform the family of the dangers they faced and helped them all they could while they were there and even after they left. Pretty good bad men, yeah!


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RosieAnnieUSA
I like the rhythm of your storytelling, it just pulls the reader right in.
I like the way Tom noticed they had a whole conversation without saying anything at all.
Boy howdy, hearing about Colorado winters for the first time would make you fall silent, especially the situation these folks are in, and before Thaddeus said so, I had a gut feeling the supply/wood was not in good shape. Just love how they snuck the gold pieces to the family, and that even now they repay the families of Smith and Jones. Good read, thanks of sharing.

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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyFri Feb 28, 2020 2:44 pm

WichitaRed:  Such a great tale of Wheat and Heyes and the difference in their approaches. Made me laugh out loud. 

RosieAnnieUSA:  I could feel that snowstorm creeping up on me too, even though it’s 77 here. Our boys really are more good than bad men, aren’t they?
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyTue Mar 03, 2020 11:38 am

Wichita Red: LOL! Well, he did scout the town, didn't he? Not that it's going to make a difference, since he just raised a ruckus. Of course, the fight turned into a general melee, and of course, the DHG will jump in. All except the rational ones, who had enough brains to stay outside. I loved this!
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Nightwalker



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySat Mar 07, 2020 8:07 am

WichitaRed – Wow, a lot of action going on in your story with detailed descriptions of the fight; very well written. Love it that Heyes and Curry stay out of the mess watching the street while the rest of the gang’s going to help Wheat. Interesting insight into the dynamics of the gang.
 
RosieAnnieUSA – Oh my, poor family getting caught in a snowstorm without enough preparation. The first winter is quite a dangerous thing for unexperienced folks. So lucky that two friendly ex-outlaws appeared just in time with lots of advice and willing to help out. It’s a lovely tradition the family started afterwards, remembering their kind guests and helping others in need.
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gin16



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyTue Mar 31, 2020 9:26 pm

Remuda:  I know next to nothing about poker but I liked this story and I could hear the sailors' accent loud and clear.

UK_rachel74:  At least they will get too eat every day for awhile.  I am hoping that there will be a part two so we can see what happens when they find the gang?

InsideOutlaw:  The telephone, one of the things that put them out of business.  Maisie didn't really want to get Heyes arrested, she just wanted to rile him up and have a good time.  As Heyes said, she could have had the law on them any time she wanted.
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Nightwalker



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySat Apr 04, 2020 12:00 am

Remuda – Love the sailor. He seems to be pretty excited for sure. How wouldn’t, given the opportunity for a game with our boys? It’s only for the Kid that the evening didn’t turn ugly. I’m glad he was there to keep an eye on things.

UK_rachel74 I wouldn’t want to believe it: Heyes and Curry going after former gang members? That can’t mean anything but trouble. If the word spread their lives wouldn’t be worth one dime anymore. It’s inacceptable that the governor asked them for that kind of job. Does he want to get rid of the boys so nobody will ever learn about their deal? Does he regret that he offered them amnesty?


InsideOutlaw – Oh my, Wheat is happening again. That was about my first thought, but it was only a harmless discovery he made. At least it seemed so at first.
I love the way Kid Curry is always alert and assessing the situation even in a relative secure place. I can understand Heyes’s excitement when he gets the chance to check out that ultra-modern device, they found in such an unexpected place. It’s so easy to imagine his joyful face – at least for the short time it lasts. The second surprise – to learn who’s at the other end of the line – made him everything but happy.
I couldn’t believe it that he took it as a prompt to fall out with the mistress of the house. He knows her occupation, so what did he expect? I’m just glad he worked his magic again. He surely enjoys playing with dangerous things - whether it’s dynamite or women – and he knows very well how to handle both.
But the boys learned their lesson well and come to a most famous conclusion in the end.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySat Apr 04, 2020 7:10 am

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Remuda: I like how you take us into the heart of the story in the first two lines; that the sailor doesn't know what he's doing, and Heyes is watching out for him. And trying to keep the peace, with other players who aren't quite as understanding or patient.

UK_rachel74: I sure hope this is the start to a longer story, because you've already drawn me in. Is their propensity for forgetting each other's alias going to be a plot point? More issues with the governor? Going after another gang can't be good. Like I said earlier - you've drawn me in. 

Inside Outlaw: As always, you pack a lot of story into a small space, and yet, nothing or nobody is shortchanged. Heyes goes from almost childish excitement to worry and concern pretty quick, as he realizes the implications of instant communication via telephone. Maisie's a handful, isn't she? But Heyes knows how to handle her mood changes. Interesting conclusion, with Heyes being the partner who chooses to go for amnesty.
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gin16



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyWed Apr 15, 2020 3:42 pm

UK_rachel74:  What a great read that was.  Heyes has a right to be very angry.  I think Kid needs to be angry also, it will help him recover.  Only problem with the story is:  it is way too short!
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySun Apr 19, 2020 9:23 am

UK_rachel74:  What a great use of the prompt.  You would have thought the boys would have told off Lom long before they did, wouldn’t you?  Butch and Sundance didn’t even wait a day when their attempt at amnesty went awry.  I can see Heyes getting upset with the Kid hurt and finally making it over that ledge.  Of course we all wanted them to get amnesty, but was it ever more than a pipe dream?


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyFri May 01, 2020 10:00 pm

UK_rachel74:  Wow, did that not tug at the heart.  How simple and touching.  Thank you.

Keays:  Revised:  How many roles did Heyes have in this story, 3.  The concerned brother buying presents for his sisters.  Himself when he returns to the hotel room he is the gang leader making sure everything is going according to plan, then inept employee who can't read and knows nothing about nitro.  Then at the end, the planner who of course has time to fit in a dalliance with an attractive woman before he robs the bank, what a guy.

Chelseagirl:  Of course you need to continue it!  Had me smiling and laughing from the beginning.  "Don't you even dare think what I know you are thinking?  of course she is right.  I think that they might find that they like Millicent just fine, Heyes already likes that she can make Ella snort out loud, which is most unlady like.

Nebraska Wildfire:  What is it about spectacles that make a person unattractive?  Our guys are not perfect.  They did seem to enjoy their the time they spent with the ladies as they passed their time before the robbery.  Liked Heyes coded message for Kyle to bring 'the good stuff', made him happy.  I really liked that Heyes sent money to Miss Morris to help her out with teaching, was it guilt or did he care enough to help her out?.

HannahHeyes:  Boy did I need a laugh today and you gave it to me.  Kid was so upset with Heyes, he couldn't even think straight.  I loved his rant at Heyes and Heyes had not a clue as to why.  I loved it.  Thank you.


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySat May 02, 2020 7:39 am

Nice job Rachel. I was sad to see Heyes taking it out on Lom, but I can understand Heyes' fear and anger. When your scared like that, you take it out on the person most available, and since Heyes couldn't get to the governor, Lom it is. Nicely written.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptySun May 03, 2020 1:28 pm

UK_rachel74: Good story, and an excellent use of the prompt. I really could feel Heyes boiling with anger and frustration.
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Nightwalker



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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyThu May 07, 2020 12:09 am

UK_rachel74 –Thanks for this beautiful little glimpse into Kid Curry's mind. She must have been a very special person and it seems she had a lot in common with her son.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyFri May 22, 2020 6:13 am

chelseagirl- really enjoyed this. Millicent is an interesting character! Also have now read your Ella stories on the strength of this and that is an added bonus for me. 
Keays- Nice story. Chamelion Heyes :)
Nebraska Wildfire: Fun story- loved Kid wanting Heyes to know he remembered the aliases. I liked your teacher.
Hanna Heyes- This was funny! Finally found someone with their own teeth. I really enjoyed this.


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyMon May 25, 2020 8:45 pm

UK_rachel74:  Such a touching piece, with the Kid remembering and Heyes supporting him.

Keays:  Great story showing Heyes at his smooth talking best, as we all love him.

Chelseagirl:  Miss Millicent is a great character.  I’d love to see more of her.  I could see her really annoying Heyes.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyFri May 29, 2020 2:17 pm

uk_rachel74 - This was a very sweet story. Bittersweet as well, knowing what happened. It’s always hard to dream about a lost loved one. It leaves you with a myriad of emotions when waking. Well written.

keays - Love Heyes in the woman’s hat store! And also the real reason he was there. His complete change of persona upon entering the mercantile was nicely written. Then again when he switched for the lady that approached him. If only he’d told her his real heritage of English/Irish, maybe she would’ve stayed longer. Now he’ll never know.

chelseagirl - I love the look Ella gives Heyes and Kid when walking up with Millicent! Now a meeting between Kyle and Millicent would be interesting for sure. I also love the line about Heyes still not knowing where his next meal is coming from! The rest of the story sounds interesting as well.

Nebraska Wildfire - The aliases are good ones. Horace huh? You’re right. Kid wouldn’t have liked it. Heyes and the lady on the train seemed to certainly hit it off. At least the boys got to spend dinner and a picnic with the lady and her friend. I absolutely love when he sees her under the fireworks after the robbery. And that he sent her money for books. I can’t help but hope they meet again some day. Loved it. So well written.

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HannaHeyes:  such a fun story!  Heyes getting himself in trouble and then smart enough to get himself out.  The Kid did need popcorn.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyMon Jun 01, 2020 9:26 am

Rachel74:   This is such a sweet, thoughtful story.  You call it a wallow, but I think lines like this one raise it to another level:  “she was there in his mind, but always in shadow, as if she were frightened of his other darker, more recent memories, although in life, he remembered she had rarely been afraid of anything.”   I also really liked the way Heyes could sense when Curry had dreamed, and responded accordingly without having to say anything about it.
 
Keays:  There are so many “hers” in this one, it’s hard to know where to start.  I like seeing Heyes play so many different roles, and doing it so well!  The last "her" seems to be going somewhere potentially interesting – can I hope that, like mine this month also, it’s part of something longer?
 
Nebraska Wildfire:  Your story really had the feeling of an episode, if “Heyes and Curry: The Outlaw Years” had ever been a series.   It’s funny that we both had bespectacled “her”s;  Grace was an interesting character and I’d like to know more about her life teaching on the reservation even if Heyes never came back into her life.
 
Hanna Heyes:  This is hilarious!   Admittedly, I can’t see Heyes doing anything quite THIS stupid, but it’s funny as anything, and you have the interaction between the guys down perfectly.   Curry get to make such deserved fun of his partner, and he makes the most of his opportunity.  


And thank you all for cheering Millie on in her debut.  I set this one aside awhile ago, and I see a lot better where it's going to go now.  I have a pretty good idea who "Him" might be for next month.  Very Happy  It was really fun reading everyone's stories this month;  I need to remember to stop by more often, even when I'm not contributing myself!
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyThu Jun 04, 2020 12:56 pm

Rachel74: What a lovely reminiscence. I expect both of them would have dreams like this and hopefully, they would bring comfort. Nice that Heyes recognizes the signs and is supportive. Love ". . . painting pictures with his voice . . ." That's a great line.


Chelseagirl: A lady lawyer! Oh my. ONe does tend to conjure up a visual image of what she's going to be like, right or wrong. I love the conversation between the two ladies. "You know--girl talk."!


Nebraska Wildfire: It must be a challenge for the fellas to come up with new aliases. Heyes seems to have fun with it though. How typical of guys to dismiss a woman based upon the opinion that ". . . she wasn't overly pretty." Sometimes, all a man has to do is take some time to chat and suddenly the plain woman becomes someone of interest. 


HannaHeyes: What a hoot! Kid really plays it for laughs in this one. Well, it's not often he has the genius at a disadvantage. Fun read.
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Nightwalker:  I can understand how a girl could get lost in those blue, blue eyes and not bother to look further.  I can’t say I’d do that, but it ended up lucky for Heyes this time.  I loved his storytelling and choice of disguise.  We need another story with B. Cute.
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Nightwalker:  I enjoyed your story a bunch.  Grace's description of the robber seemed right on to me.  Loved Heyes reaction being relegated to a 'sidekick', and I am quite sure that he does know a whole lot about ladies undergarments.

Chelseagirl:  What a great chapter.  I love that Millie sees something in Kyle and wants to help him, and to enlist Rita's help was so thoughtful, and she helped Rita to see that she could be more than a whore. Kid remembering how he was made to feel back at the home was touching.i

Remuda: I enjoyed this story a lot.  Jed did well with his word and I liked his explanation of why A was acceptable as a word.

UK_rachel74:  This is a good story.  I always liked Preacher and I like this backstory on him, very moving.

Stepha3nie:  What a wonderful story.  How moving, yes I agree Kid would want Heyes to be someplace safe and he knew that he would be there.  Welcome back to writing.  Very well done.


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Applause and Feedback - Page 36 EmptyFri Jun 12, 2020 9:02 am

Nightwalker: Great descriptions, enjoyable story :) Poor Heyes relegated to sidekick. Sheriff Cute is a lot of fun.
Chelseagirl: Millie is a great character, so happy for Kyle :)
Remuda : such a sweet childhood glimpse. Enjoyed this.












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Chelseagirl:  It was nice to see Millicent again and of course Kyle too.  It is nice to see him prosper also in the end.

Remuda:  A tale of Jed doing well in school, while still maybe in trouble, seems very much in character.  A lovely tale.
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