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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Mon Dec 11, 2017 1:23 pm

Nebraska Wildfire - Oh, what a perfect Christmas tale. The poor couple, who still manage to help those even poorer, get a little leg up financially from the boys. You also managed to get some good old outlaw fun and action in there too and the lucky lady got Heyes to lie on top of her as well as a lovely handkerchief. What more could a lady ask for?

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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Tue Dec 12, 2017 12:38 am

Silverkelpie:  A chapter full of tension.  Heyes is distraught, realizing just how much he really does care for her and Kid is there for him whatever happens.  How will Heyes know that she survives?  Does he jeopardize by going back to find out.?

Nebraska Wildfire:  A great tale.  Helping out others in need.  It was kind of the storekeeper telling her that he had added to other peoples' accounts before so that she wouldn't feel so awkward about accepting the help.  And the gift of the handkerchief, how thoughtful that was.

HannaHeyes:  I love their letters to Santa.  Han always has an explanation for his actions.  What a mind you have, If life hands you lemons, throw them at the people that caused your problems,  love it.  Somehow Jed's letter is always so much shorter than Han's is.

Nell Mckeon:  A wonderful story.  You write Kid so well.  A man of few words most of the time, but when he says something that is important to him, he is willing to put aside long buried hurts.

Rosieannie:  Heyes really should listen to Kid more, they could avoid a whole of trouble if he did, but it sounds like Heyes had a really good time making Sawyer look bad.  I'm glad they found a good place to stay, complete with plenty of food.


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Fri Dec 22, 2017 6:28 pm

HannaHeyes - Hilarious! More than enough festive fun for everyone here, and Little Heyes is right in character for a too-clever-by-half boy heading for a life of crime. I felt sorry for the poor teacher. And little Jed's shooting spree? Hah! Yes, that's the best thing to do when life hands you lemons. Lol, and a potato under the tree? Poor Santa.

Nell McKeon - Loving the historical notes at the end. They bring extra veracity to the tale full of detail a poignancy. You catch the boys in character right from the start, describing every glance, thought, and nuance to layer the depictions perfectly. What an original premise for a story, and the glimpse into the Kid's dreams for the future was heart-warming.

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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Tue Dec 26, 2017 8:49 pm

HannaHeyes:  I love these Santa letters.  They are so much fun, showing the boys as typical kids, even if a bit precocious.  The story makes me wonder if they would have ended up as they did, no matter what their history.  Maybe they were responsible for their fate, and not victims.
  
  
Nell McKeon:  The question often comes up of what the boys could do when and if they ever get amnesty.  This story shows that they are capable of almost anything to which they put their determination.  Heyes uses his innate showmanship to up sell and the Kid smiles at the children, showing something innate in him too.  The discussion between them about the picture is the perfect ending, poignant but “keeping the faith.”


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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Fri Dec 29, 2017 3:32 pm

RosieAnnieUSA:  Thank you for sharing such a lovely tale of the boys in their Devil’s Hole days.  The characterizations are of course spot on.  Heyes is his cocksure self, as leader of the gang, Curry, cautious, and keeping his partner in check, Kyle just happy about a ham and whiskey, and Wheat, being Wheat.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Sun Dec 31, 2017 10:05 am

RosieAnnie - So we finally find out why Wade Sawyer hates the boys so much and we see them turn lemons into lemonade as they hunker down and have a rather good Christmas holed up in a well-stocked cabin. Full of wonderful little touches which shows the reader who characters are and what makes them tick, the dialogue is masterful. Thanks for this lovely seasonal piece.

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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Mon Jan 01, 2018 12:24 pm

December stories:

Silverkelpie: You use your knowledge of the 19th century so effectively in stories. Blood transfusions? An act of desperation, it doesn't usually work (and we don't know why), but we've got nothing else. Also, how easy would it have been to just declare death and not pick up on that faint, faint breath? I'm so glad I live now, instead of then.

Nebraska Wildfire: I love Heyes, as he is getting ready to ride off after the robbery and explosion, all that excitement and some mistreatment of civilians, and he still wishes them to "have a good day!" And yeah, they are pretty good bad men, aren't they? It's the wonderful dichotomy that makes them such interesting characters. Heyes pays for Marie's goods, and for other people's, and it's all from stolen money. 

Hanna Heyes: Those letters are so much in character! I can so easily see a clever boy trying to wheedle his way out of some not-too-serious misdeeds, and the other with an appetite for treats. Charming story.

Nell McKeon: Sweet and nostalgic, with an undercurrent of loneliness and regret. How do you do that, anyway? And you and that farmer were right; it's the simple, everyday moments that we need to treasure. You really hit all the right emotional notes here.
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Mon Jan 01, 2018 3:07 pm

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Silverkelpie- Another tension filled chapter with Abi's ife in the balance and Heyes coming to realization of just how much she means to him. So Heyes and Abi have the same blood type (although not known at the time), nice nod to early medical knowledge. In a typically gripping chapter the last two short paragraphs were what really elevated your writing. 


Nebraska Wildfire - This was an engaging tale of some pretty good bad man doing good with ill-gotten gains. It sure plays havoc the honest folks ethics.


Hanna Heyes - Thanks for the delightful in character letters to Santa Claus. The silver tongue and roguish charm from Han and Jed's  directness but I'm not sure how Santa will react to the substitution of a potato for two cookies.


Rosie Annie -  Well that explains the animosity and determination of Wade Sawyer and Kid knows it. Great illustration of Heyes at his cocky, confident best. Like others have said I imagined the well stocked cabin to be Sawyers and it gave me even more chuckles reading your wonderfully humorous (great dialogue!) story. 
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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Tue Jan 09, 2018 6:41 pm

Finally got around to commenting on December's stories...

Silverkelpie - I'm glad I knew Abi would be okay while reading this. Has Heyes truly fallen in love? I liked the ending paragraphs when Kid was pondering on the possibility that Abi might be an image of Heyes' life had they had a better start. Is this the end of this one or is there more? I hope so!

Nebraska Wildfire - I loved this story. You show the goodness that is still there, hidden in the boys' hearts. Really liked the interaction between Heyes and the couple, especially Marie, and their reaction to him. Loved the ending. Maybe the Robin Hood comparison is more true than anyone thought.

Nell McKeon - This was bittersweet to me, but I really enjoyed it. I don't think I've ever read where the boys were involved in that kind of job. And they each had the perfect part of the job, Heyes handling the business end and Kid dealing with the children. The bittersweet part was when Kid was staring at the farm and keeping the picture. Very well written.

RosieAnnie - I loved your story as well! I would LOVE to know how Heyes made Sawyer look like a fool. And Heyes stole his badge! Love it! But he might want to listen to Kid about this. I'd love to read a story about the next time they meet.

*Now on to January...*

RosieAnnie - This was delightful. You had Harry's character down perfect throughout the whole thing. Really enjoyed the story from his perspective. I take it the boys got amnesty at some point in time?

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PostSubject: Re: Applause and Feedback   Tue Jan 09, 2018 10:03 pm

RosieAnnie - This month's challenge stories are off to a great start with your offering. Any story with Harry Briscoe is a winner in my book. You have Harry's character wonderfully illustrated with the the Jenkins/Johnson name confusion, the meandering discussions, and the rhythm of his speech. Thanks for the take on Brimstone from Briscoe's perspective. 

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